Real Essays That Worked

College Essay Examples From Ivy League Admits

See annotated essays from students admitted to Harvard, Yale, Columbia, Stanford, and more. Learn what made each essay successful—and how to apply those lessons to your own writing.

What Makes a College Essay Work?

The pattern that separates forgettable essays from memorable ones

"Detail is what differentiates one essay from another, one applicant from another. A single great sentence can save an essay."

— Parke Muth, Former Associate Dean of Admissions, UVA

Read over 10,000 essays during his career

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Abstraction

"I learned the importance of perseverance"

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Concrete, sensory detail

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Specificity

"At 3 AM, my fingers cramped around the soldering iron..."

Essay Examples Analyzed

What worked and why—insights you can apply today

The Croissant Essay

Accepted to Columbia

A simple breakfast ritual became a meditation on cultural identity. The essay worked because it used concrete sensory details—the 'buttery, flaky layers'—to explore belonging.

Key Lesson: Mundane topics reveal character better than exotic adventures.

The Debate Team Essay

Accepted to Harvard

Instead of listing tournament wins, the student focused on a single moment of losing—and what it taught them about intellectual humility.

Key Lesson: Failure + growth beats accomplishment every time.

The Hospital Volunteer Essay

Accepted to Yale

Rather than describing medical procedures, the student wrote about one conversation with a patient who changed their perspective on mortality.

Key Lesson: Zoom in on one moment instead of summarizing many.

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What You'll Learn From Each Example

How the essay opens with an immediate hook

Where concrete details replace vague claims

How the writer reveals personality naturally

What makes the ending memorable

How values are shown, not stated

Why this topic worked for this student

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